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Nowadays some parents give money to their children if they perform well at school. Do you think this is good or bad trend?


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ĐĂNG PHẢN HỒI CỦA BẠN CHO BÀI HỌC NÀY
CÁC Ý KIẾN BÌNH LUẬN - PHẢN HỒI VỀ BÀI HỌC NÀY

Xuanmai317

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Students studying is often taken into consideration so that they can become excellent pupils and a terrific gratification of parents. Beside coercing offsprings into industriously hitting the book or registering online courses, a multitude of parents set a specific reward which is money with a view to making their children achieve gigantic accomplishments as well as good marks. For my money, it is not a pretty positive tendency. On the one hand, that parents put a valuable gift as a great deal of money has some adverse ramifications on children because they are not aware of the studying’s crucial role. In fact, they will make gigantic efforts to pass the exam with high colors by hook or by crook. To exemplify, they may cheat in the exam or learn parrot-fashion for the oncoming exam. As a result, although they learn so much knowledge, they are not capable of widening their mind. Moreover, it is safe to say that parents will accidentally lead their offsprings to become greedy and just-money lovers. Indeed, when they meet the demand of parents, they will require more and more money on the grounds that they are super remarkable and make parents on cloud nine. It will significantly affect their characteristics. On the other hand, some schools of thoughts opine that adults should reward money for children as it gives them extraordinary motivations and vehement attempts to conquer arduous objectives. To illustrate, instead of cramming for the forthcoming tests, they will surely try their best to study scrupulously all sources of knowledge. In addition, students will not get cold feet when encountering many arduous geometry exercises and assignments. Accordingly, they devote an incredible amount of time to finding more materials, using brainstorming and critical thinking skills to work out the final answer. To recapitulate, it is indisputable that giving money to students when they are profound at school is double-edged. From my perspective, it is not a perfect method for parents to push their children to develop by leaps and bounds. Hence, it would be better if parents give sound advice and encourage children on a regular basis.
Gửi lúc: 23:03:35 ngày 06-07-2021
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Time : 2021-07-18 14:42:30

 

Students studying is often taken into consideration so that they can become excellent pupils and a terrific gratification of parents. Besides coercing offsprings into industriously hitting the book or registering online courses, a multitude of parents set a specific reward which is money with a view to making their children achieve gigantic accomplishments as well as good marks. For my money, it is not a pretty positive tendency.

On the one hand, that parents put reward children with a valuable gift as a great deal of money has some adverse ramifications on children because they are not aware of the studying’s crucial role. In fact, they will make gigantic efforts to pass the exam with high flying colors by hook or by crook. To exemplify, they may cheat in the exam or learn parrot-fashion for the oncoming exam. As a result, although they learn so much knowledge, they are not capable of widening their mind. Moreover, it is safe to say that parents will accidentally lead their offsprings to become greedy and just-money lovers. Indeed, when they meet the demand of parents, they will require more and more money on the grounds that they are super remarkable and make parents on cloud nine. It will significantly affect their characteristics.

On the other hand, some schools of thoughts opine that adults should reward money for children as it gives them extraordinary motivations and vehement attempts to conquer arduous objectives. To illustrate, instead of cramming for the forthcoming tests, they will surely try their best to study scrupulously all sources of knowledge. In addition, students will not get cold feet when encountering many arduous geometry exercises and assignments. Accordingly, they devote an incredible amount of time to finding more materials, using brainstorming and critical thinking skills to work out the final answer.

To recapitulate, it is indisputable that giving money to students when they are profound at school is double-edged. From my perspective, it is not a perfect method for parents to push their children to develop by leaps and bounds. Hence, it would be better if parents give sound advice and encourage children on a regular basis.

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In my opinion, this is a bad trend because students will not spend properly. Maybe they can easily use that money to buy miscellaneous things. In case they may lie to their parents, how good they are in class today and of course, parents will believe what their children say and reward them. They will probably use that money to play games and cause their learning power to be severely reduced. They will sit in class all day thinking about how to quickly finish the lesson and go back to lie to their parents for a reward. And of course, their learning force keeps decreasing and decreasing without their parents knowing. So this trend should not be followed.
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Time : 2021-07-18 14:42:11

 

In my opinion, this is a bad trend because students will not spend properly. Maybe they can easily use that money to buy miscellaneous things. In case they may lie to their parents, how good they are in class today and of course, parents will believe what their children say and reward them. They will probably use that money to play games and cause their learning power academic performance to be severely reduced. They will sit in class all day thinking about how to quickly finish the lesson and go back to lie to their parents for a reward. And of course, their learning force academic performance keeps decreasing and decreasing without their parents knowing. So this trend should not be followed.

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In my opinion, this is a bad trend. If my child gets good results in class, I should reward him with a hearty meal, a new toy or a story he likes,... But if the parents reward him with money, they will lead. that your child will be exposed to money too soon. I will go buy snacks or toys, etc. When my children already like those things, buy them often and their academic performance will decrease. At that time, parents will not give pocket money anymore, the children begin to have bad intentions such as stealing money from their parents or inciting their friends to go home and ask for money from their parents. In short, this is a bad trend in my opinion.
Gửi lúc: 21:48:23 ngày 06-07-2021
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Time : 2021-07-18 14:41:48

 

In my opinion, this is a bad trend. If my child gets good results in class, I should reward him with a hearty meal, a new toy or a story he likes,... But if the parents reward him with money, they will lead. that your child will be exposed to money too soon. I will go buy snacks or toys, etc. When my children already like those things, buy them often and their academic performance will decrease. At that time, parents will not give pocket money anymore, the children begin to have bad intentions such as stealing money from their parents or inciting their friends to go home and ask for money from their parents. In short, this is a bad trend in my opinion.

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Nowadays some parents give money
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Time : 2021-07-07 17:05:11

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School grades are the most important measurements for assessing the students' performance at school. So the students should be encouraged to study their lessons well to get a high score. This often brings up a controversial question: How can parents exhort their children to study more? In my point of view, parents can reward their children by giving them money. This will kill two birds with one stone: Children can learn the value of both education and money. What follows is an elaboration of my viewpoint. Children learn that education is very important for their future development through the process of getting rewards from their parents for their better school results. That is to say, when parents give their children money, they encourage their children to study more. Consequently, the children gradually get accustomed to studying, and finally learn the value of education when they become older. For example, when I was 7 years old, my father paid me some money for my full score in my report card. The next years, I tried harder to get more money and I gradually become interested in studying my lessons and gaining knowledge. And that is how I got a hint from money, found out how important the education is in the future life and in facing better job opportunities, and continued my education.Earning and spending money is a very difficult task nowadays that should be learned in childhood. This can happen through offering money by parents to their children for their school grades. In fact, children learn to spend the money that they have earned through hard work for a good result in school. This is similar to a career situation that children will face when they become adults. For instance, my friend used to write her expenses and the money that her parents gave her when she was at high school. She learned how to manage her money and had a huge saving when she finished her high school. Additionally, she is her own accountant right now and never has encountered financial problems due to her experience at high school. Admittedly, payment of money for the best grades in school by parents poses some bad effects on children, including changing the children's priorities to money matters and making them to study the lessons superficially only to get a high score. Nonetheless, I believe that parents should reward their children's good results in school because new teaching and assessing methods can compensate the disadvantages of money rewards. Relevant statistics indicate that new methods have improved the way students study and made them to study the lessons practically and deeply. Decisively, if one assess the aforementioned merits of offering money to children for their high grades, one soon realizes that it is worth to pay the money. In fact, rewarding children with money can result in better future life because children gradually become interested in education, continue their education and face better job opportunities. Furthermore, they learn to manage their income and expenses in the future by managing their money that they earned during childhood in school.
Gửi lúc: 21:10:40 ngày 06-07-2021
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